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Ch. 1: Woh! We're In Hoenn

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On the planet there once inhabited many lives of humans and of strange and mysterious little creatures. These creatures were so magical and fascinating; these were called... Pokemon. On this planet there were many diverse regions. One in specific would soon experience the likes of new trainers as they start their own adventure. These trainers will have one goal in mind, becoming the best they can be. This specific region is heavenly refereed to as: Hoenn. The home to many vast and beautiful oceans; homing the lives of sea creatures. Most vacationed here, while many lived their in harmony.

Today we have some special trainers, these special people will be receiving there first Pokemon from the professor, a solemnly jolly man named Professor Birch. He will hand out three Pokemon, these three will either be Treecko, Mudkip or Torchic.


Riding on a bike, a vibrant young lady; looking to be about the age of fifteen, with bright blue hair that was softly placed on her shoulders. She wore a violet colored cap with a red shirt and a white jacket vest that stopped at her bellybutton. She seemed to also be sporting tight blue shorts and sneakers. In a way she looked to be in top shape.

She had a determined look on her face as she peddled quickly down the path. As she rode up the hills around to the city parts, she stopped. "Wait... left? right...left? No, it's up...ugh!" She clambered. She face palmed into her bike handles. "I am so lost..." She moaned.

"Ahem." A boys voice was heard. She slowly picked her head up and saw a exhilarating young boy in front of her. Looking around the same age as herself. He sported a red shirt and some spiky looking hair that matched his some-what perky looking attitude. "Did you need any help?" He asked.

"Maybe..." She answered. "i just seemed to have lost my ways trying to find the professor's lab." She explained.

His faced bared a warm smile. "Well, aren't you in luck!" He exclaimed.

"What do you mean?" She asked.

"It just so happens that, I, myself are here to see the professor too." He smiled. He looked in the vast city ahead of them. "It's big, but... It should be no match for the two of us." He explained.

She smiled, almost like a relieve to her. "What's your name?" She asked, as they both walked down the path together holding her bike in her hands.

He turned her head towards her. "Zack, Zack Gearings!" He smirked.

She smiled back at him. "Nice to meet you, Zack." She bowed her head. "The name is Maria Puckett." She introduced. She then jumped back onto her bike, ready to head off and find this lab. As she did, from the distance on the left; a flash in the sky was seen. They both lifted their heads and suddenly a green blur like figure zoomed across the sky and disappeared.

Maria looked at Zack and he did the same. "What do you think that was?" Maria asked.

He looked back out to the sky. "A miracle." He said, continuing his way along the path.

She looked at him and had the urge to smile, it was as if she felt something warm and magical surround her body. It made her feel blissful and full of positive energy. She then followed behind.

After a couple hours of walking and chitchatting, they both appeared in front of an immense white building. "Oh-Em-Gee! We finally made it!" She cheered.

Zack sighed of relief. "Yes, we made it." They both waltzed right in with no hesitation. As they opened the white doors, they were immediately greeted by an older gentlemen. "Hello." He bowed. "You two must be; Maria Puckett and Zachary Gearings." He asked.

"That's correct...but, how did you know?" Maria asked.

"Well, I am the professor after all." He introduced, with a large and welcoming smile. From behind the professor, another young boy appeared. Wearing loads of different shades of green. He sounded as if he was raised in an upper class family. "Greetings, my moniker is Tyler." He introduced.

Zack stepped forward and shook his hand. "Nice to meet you, I'm Zack and this over here is Maria." He smiled.

Tyler looked over at Maria and she revealed a tiny blush before shaking his hand.

"So what shall you three be choosing?" Prof. Birch asked as he guided them through the lab to see the three Pokemon they were destined to be with.

Maria saw the many Pokemon and instantly was overjoyed by them all. "I love'em!" Maria shouted. Everyone looked back at her with a startled but not an annoyed look as they weren't expecting her outburst.

She blushed. "Oops--Heh, my bad..." She giggled.

Birch smiled. "Well over here we have three rare starters of Hoenn." He explained. He shuffled around the counter to the three patient Pokemon. "Here we have the intelligent Treecko, the water type Mudkip and the little chickadee; Torchic."

Maria gazed her eyes over all three of them. She liked them all, but, she knew that the one she would pick would be hers forever. With that in her mind she examined them carefully. She looked at Treecko; He looked a bit too green and plain for her. Mudkip was cute but looked a little to watery in a sense for her taste. Then she locked her eyes on Torchic--it was perfect. The Pokemon was adorable, fresh looking and totally her taste.

"Well, if you guys don't mind..." Tyler stepped forward. "I would love to have that 'intelligent' Treecko." He claimed.

Zack smirked. "That's fine with me!" He said. "I've got my sets on that feisty little Mudkip over there." Zack explained.

Maria's face perked up. "Well, I guess that leaves me with the last Pokemon, Torchic!" Maria said with a bit sarcasm in her voice. Everyone could tell she wanted the Pokemon but let her keep on acting.

The Professor smiled. "Here are your five Pokeballs" He handed. He then pulled out a special device in a drawer. "Now, here is your official and honorary Pokedexs. Now go have a wonderful adventure!" Birch smiled.

All three of them grabbed their Pokemon and excitedly boosted a loud cheer, they also all decided to travel together.
Here is the official new chapter of Hoenn Busters! I'm so excited to be starting this back up. I will be incorporating the new ORAS games into this rebooted series. I also thought of rebooting this for the fact that I have a lot better writing skills than before. (: I'm just so happy that I got the first chapter up. Who or what do you think was in the sky that Maria and Zack saw? Oh and btw the chapters I upload will be sort of the same but a bit different and kinda better. I would love feedback and fans from my friends and fellow deviants. ^.^
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||Chapter One|| -> ||Chapter Two||

A new young trainer named Maria meets new friends as she ventures out into Hoenn to obtain her first Pokemon and become and fresh new challenger of the Pokemon league.
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Maria, Zack, Tyson belong to Pohlranda3
Pokemon belongs to gamefreak
Picture belongs to Bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net
© 2015 - 2024 Pohlranda3
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Trueform's avatar
Well, you're off to a good start so you're doing well. I have a few tips if you like :)

1. When it comes to writing, try not to use the same descriptive word over and over; although this can be done sometimes in special circumstances, when you're writing a story with a straight forward layout, try looking up different synonyms. For example, you use 'trainers' and 'planet' more than once in the first paragraph - you could use 'people' and 'specialists' and 'world' to mix things up :)

2. When using descriptive terms, be certain they make sense - for example, you use 'solemnly jolly' but if you're jolly, you can't be solemn as the two contradict each other. You also use the term 'clambered' when Maria is talking to herself (if you mean 'clammered' it would also not be accurate, so maybe 'babbled' would be better?)

Generally, I agree with the other comment here in that it's important to try and make an impact with your main characters. They need something to make them stand out, some visual or personality trait that makes them memorable or different as protagonists to hold the interests of readers.

Certain characters that are unimportant to the story but are featured (I know this doesn't really apply to your story, but for example, a blacksmith or an inn keeper) can be generic because it serves the purpose of the story and it's easy to imagine them for the sake of a small role. Cast your characters like you would cast an actor in a film.

3. Make sure you're using words that seem familiar but actually have different meanings correctly. For example, 'to' 'two' and 'too' or 'its' and 'it's' since they can read very differently when use incorrectly :) grammar like hyphens and semicolons can also add to the impact of a story but only when used correctly - do some research on how to use these in the correct places on the internet and it will add an extra layer to your story!

That's about all I can think of from the top of my head, I hope it helped! Keep up the good work.